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The Volcano



for many years the volcano has been asleep

then all of a sudden

it decides to  wake up

with a mighty explosion

it erupts

sending out  a thick cloud of  ash  into the sky

 with in minutes, the sun disappears

turning day into night

 hot molten rock 

spills out from the top and begins to flow

soon a river of lava is formed

it’s path is deadly

for any thing in that gets in the way will be destroyed

this  is a volcano that will show’s no mercy

 


— karen, Jun 08, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

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Arrow

17 years ago

I felt a little adrift, unsure

of the point I was supposed to get, the greater meaning. How am I supposed to feel about this deadly volcano or similar natural events? For me, it is a little dry. At the end, one gets the sense the volcano is enraged, but why? What has it experienced, what can't it tolerate any longer? I wish there were more here.

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