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Geremia
Geremia
Jun 10, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

STARGAZER

STARGAZERI am the smoke of a dying flame Turning aimlesslyLazilyThrough the air.I am the sparkThe fireGoing somewhereFading now into nowhere.I am an evaporating soulDissipatingAndGrowing coldOnceCinders of a burning starSearing human dreamsOf going farTo be someone.I am a colorless entityFading slowlySoon to be none.
— Geremia, Jun 10, 2009

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years ago

How BEAUTIFULLY sad

How beautiful the picture you paint, the most lovely skyward journey of smoke, of vapours, just lovely my Longobardolino. You make it into something delicate and ephemeral, smooth and graceful when its reality is of another character, even the colourless end is beautiful. Magician. Annuccia.
Geremia

Geremia

17 years ago

Yes

J.B. Longo-Geremia You read me well and expressed it beautifully... Thank you, Joe

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