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Sit
You’ve said your piece and I don’t agree
Your facts are wrong but you won’t care
Looking at me with that sinister stare
I’ve listened to your lies so let me speak
I’ve the answers you don’t want to hear
Seen this before, I await your false tear
Sit down
Shut up
And close that fucking mouth
Sit down
Shut up
And close your fucking mouth
My truth has been told and you don’t care
My facts are right and you won’t agree
It’s in front of your eyes but you refuse to see
You’ve listened to me but you have no response
Your judgement is clouded you blinkered fool
With your wounded pride, you’re left to crawl
Get up
Fuck off
And shut that fucking mouth
Get up
Fuck off
And shut your fucking mouth
© 2011 hoodedstranger.com
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Dear Dan,
This is a fantastic song. You nailed it. You have said what I couldn't. Death to scheming witches (bitches?) Every word is a treasure. Love the venom reflected back at the source here!
Love, cat
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Cat
Cat,
needed a new angrier track with a hard and fast beat. This is to be a fast song so it may need more stanza's or a longer chorus line.
It is in demo form right now, but I am pleased with the key changes and atmosphere of it so far.
Not sure if you know the band "Combichrist"...but that is the kind of sound I am looking at.:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kRa3BU5bl-s
or
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=26AK2BgnDt0&feature=related
regards,
HS
lou
14 years ago
Dan
I have commented on this else where as you know. Just wanna say i love it.
lou
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Lou
Lou,
thanks mate,
HS
magics02
14 years ago
Wowo
I hope you felt better after this one and I have to say I have to agree with the curse going in notes and all:) I have had this similiar feeling just lately for some reason it must be something in that water over there.
You’ve said your piece and I don’t agree
Your facts are wrong but you won’t care
Looking at me with that sinister stare
I so agree and hope this is not directed at anyone in particular here..and if so I guess that is right also
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Mona
Mona,
nope this isn't directed at anybody at Neopoet...just an angry write that needed to do for a song/album.
I don't feel better because it wasn't designed to be a vent at anybody. I felt fine writing it and feel the same now it is finished. I am looking forward to recording it though...I have some ideas.
Actually I may send this to my ex...she'll love it!...not!
regards,
HS
magics02
14 years ago
I hear you
I had a few choice folks I thought about when I read this as well..I would like to hear this one in spoken word..
from the porch
with love Dan
Mona
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Mona
Mona,
yes spoken word would be good for this one.
regards,
HS
raj
14 years ago
Dan
you have surely let off a lot of steam here in these song lines...i wonder what are such songs called..."Dynamite"? lol...
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Raj
Raj,
no real steam let off, just a lyric.
Dynamite...yes, that works!! Lol!
HS