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Fleur MacDonald
Fleur MacDonald
Jun 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Now...

Now that we're here
all alone
you and I sit by the phone
we sit in fear
with our eyes in tears
our breaths
are so deep
and our hearts 
beat so clear...
— Fleur MacDonald, Jun 28, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

awww Fleur

this is one of your best you made me feel like I was watching you both ... great write .. Love Jayne x
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pint_a_stoli

16 years 11 months ago

fm1962

With this one, fm, you make your mark. How is it that a poem filled with one syllable words can render a reader's legs weak. This is simply lovely...effectively affectionate. If a picture can say a thousand words, then surely, these few words have offered us a thousand visions..all contrived from that unbridled, unparelleled and mutual yearning, given and reciprocated unspoken, that everyone searches for, yet few will ever truelly know. ...for those of us still searching, we may at least experience a hint of it here. PINT
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

oh my god,

I feel a little hesitant about posting anymore, incase they don't live up to this one. But I feel brave enough to continue. I am so honoured that my little work has made it's mark on you and others! Thankyou so much :)fleur

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