Rain

I got caught in the rain
browsing
dashed for shelter
all alone
sun still in the sky
soaked
left umbrella at home
rain stops
should of sung in the rain...

— Fleur MacDonald, Jul 03, 2009

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Country/Region: AUS

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Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Rain

I think it would read better something like this: Caught in the rain browsing This is just my suggestion. Other than that I enjoyed the poem. Always, Cat

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Cat, but I thought about that before posting and I liked it the first way! :)fleur

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

My opinion ......

My opinion is... "I too, like it better your way." Looks better! Brevity isn't always preferable.~ Geezer.

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks Geezer

great minds think alike!! :)fleur

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Ann of Norway Sweet drops, and if you sing did youe expect to make them go away or make them dance even more? Sometimes it so lovely to forget that one hasn't any rainclothes and facing the sky feel like a leaf. Love Ann

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Rain

About the Author

Critiques

Rain

Thanks

My opinion ......

Thanks Geezer

Just a drop of rain.