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A Burning Bush

Waiting has burned and shaped a landscape Smoldering or raging, it has seared our hearts Ashes are piled all around and on my head The urge to beg overwhelmed me many times Reaching for the impossible was not my idea Seeking, seeking, seeking was all I could do Certain I would know it on sight, anyone would For the drive to keep going, the need was enough I looked over and again in the same wrong places The pain gouged at that same part of my body Good that I learned the lesson I fear forgetting Now I have a permanent scar and I can touch it Each time I remember it came from outside of me My sad fruitless chase had been planned all along Soon after, but still waiting, on a hot dry day Standing still resting myself in a strange place With a strange person, I felt my sandals on I felt cool air on my face and I breathed in While the words I was longing to hear were spoken
— Yvonne D, Jul 05, 2009

Critiques

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Yvonne D

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Appreciate your comment. Yvonne
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meic

16 years 11 months ago

No chore for me … I

No chore for me ... I enjoyed the journey, but then I don't think it matters too much if I don't know the exact meaning of every detail of you poem. Jess [weirdelf] is right in that this is a powerful piece, truly beautifully worded. Whatever we seek, we all look in the wrong places don't we? And the answer to our particular question [sometimes so accessible] continually eludes us ... though it's good to see your poem offer hope in the end Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
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Yvonne D

16 years 11 months ago

Still tweaking

Thank you Mike! I am a baby poet. --Y
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meic

16 years 11 months ago

[Chuckles] … as are most

[Chuckles] ... as are most of us! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

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