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ginnydragon54
Jul 08, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Left in Peace

I walked away but I keep looking back

To see if you've changed or stayed the same

But I still see the same lazy man

Refusing to grow, stuck in childish ways

But that life's not for me, for you see I've moved on

And now I have peace

— ginnydragon54, Jul 08, 2009

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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Stef,

you posted it! I remember that one from chat, that was the challenge that I cheated on... my (hopefully) constructive suggestions on this one would be: I walked away, yet kept looking back Wondering if you’d changed or stayed the same But I still saw the same lazy man Refusing to grow up Stuck in the same childish ways But that life’s not for me any more For you see I’ve moved on And now I have peace What do you think? Yours, ~Nina

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