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"Looking Back"

I can’t handle praise now
And that’s the TRUTH
My flesh is out of control
And that’s the ROOT
Of ALL my EVIL
And ALL my pain
The reason I’m inconsistent
The reason I’m lame
Instead of being sound
And Full of swagger
Not appreciating each breath
Not trying to gather
All the positive thoughts
GOD has about me
Instead of looking at HIM
I’m looking at “the”
Failures I’ve chosen
And adding their cost
Needing to PRESS FORWARD
Taking back that which was lost
— chappell, Jul 12, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Hello

Your title is good and fits the piece. Your language usage is good as nothing jumps out to trip the reader. The pacing is good and doesn't drag. The theme appeals to me and the begining and ending are smooth. I'm just not sure that all the capitalized words needed to be. Good work, keep writing. Always, Cat
C

chappell

16 years 11 months ago

"Looking Back"

Thanks again Cat! Your responses are very informative/honest.

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