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Jul 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

MOONBATHING NAKED

Moonbathing naked:
eraser beams hide so much.
One blemish remains.

“Shit-with-sugar-on!”
a cuss, thought lost in childhood,
hits the spot tonight.

Vodkatini cure:
a toast – me … and a hard-on
with nowhere to go

— meic, Jul 16, 2009

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16 years 11 months ago

this is good

and I enjoyed it greatly. Short. Sweet. And to the point. Thanks for the smile that reading this gave me. Always, Cat

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16 years 11 months ago

Giving you a smile is

Giving you a smile is sufficient praise. Thank you! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

16 years 11 months ago

Meic

As far as form and content, I've nothing to add. Like Cat, I appreciated the shortness of this write - though I found myself wanting to chastise you for berating yourself (or so it seemed). ~Jess K. ----------------------- "If the shoe fits, buy another one like it!" - George Carlin "If you default on payment to an exorcist, do you get repossessed?"

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16 years 11 months ago

Naked? Aroused? … and then

Naked? Aroused? ... and then chastised! God, my vodkatini glass runneth over! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

16 years 11 months ago

Hmm...

So what DID your second stanza mean, then? I took it to mean a personal slight that you made towards your self-worth. If I was correct in my presumption, then yes, being chastised is right in order. If not... well... then I guess you can chastise me! LMFAO! Hope you enjoy your moonlit garden loungings, then. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "If the shoe fits, buy another one like it!" - George Carlin "If you default on payment to an exorcist, do you get repossessed?"

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16 years 11 months ago

I suppose it’s a piece of

I suppose it's a piece of self-ridicule - after all a man of my advanced years should be settling for dignified decency - not sitting in such a place in such a condition. So ... chastisement is in order - how do you want me [teehee]. See what I mean - incorrigible! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

16 years 11 months ago

O my. So you DO have a cure

O my. So you DO have a cure for a manly *curse* lol (God, I'd be in deep shit if I were a man....i'd have to wear a full skirt all the time...) Agreed here with the other ladies. ~A "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot

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16 years 11 months ago

A cure … maybe not - but a

A cure ... maybe not - but a decent [indecent?] anaesthetic. Well, that's my excuse for drinking vodkatinis naked in the small hours in my garden. Quite pleasant, actually ... and coooooling! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

16 years 11 months ago

I hear ya, Meic....

...I'm having a "tee-martoonie lunch" for dinner, right now ! "Write On"! #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.

16 years 11 months ago

there's something so Brit! about this one

Crisp as a G&T! Liked it a lot - esp. the last line! Cheers Boni

16 years 11 months ago

Meic

I agree with all the above and chastise you along with the rest you are naughty (hug).. Love Jayne :)

16 years 11 months ago

O. but when he’s bad,

O. but when he's bad, he's very good...that's what they say, anyway. ~A "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot

16 years 11 months ago

LOL Anna you cheeky woman

LOL Anna you cheeky woman ... made me laugh that did .... Big smiles of Love Jayne x x

16 years 11 months ago

I too....

...know of this hard-on. Once, I stood up to look for my hat and it was still in my lap. She was quite the "looker". Lol. I enjoyed the brevity of this piece. Brief in duration, but long on quality. I sooo believe and support naked moonbathing, rather than naked sunbathing...guess I'm a big fan of the shadows at my age. "Write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.

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16 years 11 months ago

shadows ...

Oh I agree, shadows are good - the more the merrier at my age - and I thank you kindly for your comments. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

16 years 1 month ago

(“Quote:-For every beauty

("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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