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Mother

She was lying in her bed

Both daughters were near

Strong bodies curved around

Bless-ed frame of woman

By holy work and holy water

Their tears were pure, shimmering

Like her eyes, her diamond hair

The sisters breathed her presence

Everything about her

They stroked her shoulders, her arms

All she had done

They kissed her cheeks, her hands.

All she had given

They held around her waist

All they had learned

Waiting with her in the dark

The air was full of years

Stories fluttered on the wall

— Yvonne D, Jul 16, 2009

Critiques

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meic

16 years 11 months ago

The last two lines are

The last two lines are sublime - just exactly right. Not that the rest of poem is anything other than excellent and mercifully free of cloying sentiment. I can believe [through your words] that there is a real woman in there, independent in the feelings she has engendered in you. A great read. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
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Yvonne D

16 years 11 months ago

I was inspired by the story

I was inspired by the story of the death of my cousin's other grandmother. Yvonne
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Diatom Shells

16 years 9 months ago

great

I thought this was very heartfelt. and precious in a way
YD

Yvonne D

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you...

for your nice comment. Yvonne

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