2 Quills

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— 2 Quills, Jul 21, 2009

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Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

The Wolf Inside My Soul

The title and everything else about this poem are AWESOME. I hope that you entered the contest with this one. I love how you ended the poem with the title line, it is my favorite line. Hope to read more of your work again soon. Always, Cat

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

The Wolf Inside My Soul

I think this Acrostic is awesome. Line 10 maybe omit "for" ? after fighting [Just a suggestion you may take it or leave it] _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

infinite_dwarf

16 years 10 months ago

Quills

I don't normally care much for acrostics, but this one came out well. There were several really powerful lines; namely: "Yielding unto nothingness my heart may simply rust" "Even in the darkest night his voice is haunting me" My only correction is: dimmit -> dammit (or damn it) and overture's -> overtures A belated welcome to the site. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Sundown you better take care if I find you've been creepin' 'round my back stairs. Sometimes I think it's a sin when I feel like I'm winnin' when I'm losing again" - Gordon Lightfoot

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

~candlewitch~

~candlewitch~ Thank you for your kind words. I am new to this site and this is my first Acrostic style poem. I did actually write it with the intent to enter it into the monthly contest just for kicks. However, I’m not quite sure if I entered it in correctly or not…hmmmm. Well I suppose we’ll see. Thanks again for stopping by. Be well, 2Quills

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

~Janice~

~Janice~ I am always open to reviewing possible ideas or suggestions and I thank you for your positive input. I agree with you and believe what you said to be a good alternative to what I have up there now. I will certainly give it some further thought. Thanks again, 2Quills

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

~Infinite Dward~

~Infinite Dwarf~ Thank you for the compliment and I’m glad that you can appreciate it. You are spot on with the corrections as the changes have already been made. And yes…those were my two favorite lines of the poem as well. Thank you for the welcome. Take care, 2Quills

ayecp33

16 years 10 months ago

Wow..

This is incredible. I really like the theme of it, and it's written beautifully. Wonderful job(:

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

ayecp33

I apreciate those kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it and feel free to stop by anytime. Thank you and Be Well, 2Quills

Tink

16 years 10 months ago

Quill,

This is well put together and the story is strong. You tell it well. I hope you put this in for the July contest - if not please do! Didn't you ask me what acrostic was??? Are you sure you never did one before?? I even like the rhyme....lol. Corey, this is awesome for your first attempt at it. And me being a vampire fan, i just love the theme! Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

Tink (Deb)

I'll make sure to keep my fingers crossed on that contest, I tried it so we'll see. And YES I am sure that I never did one before. Believe me i'd remember since this one was a tad tricky to write. I've never realy been one for following the rules lol. But WOW!!! Thank you for those amazing words, I'm actually kind of suprised that people have responded to it as well as they have. Stop on by anytime. Thanks again, Corey (2Quills)

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Wow Kudos I just tried my

Wow Kudos I just tried my first acroustic and bummed it ... and Now this is how its done lol... Regards Jayne x x

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

Seren

lol...I don't blame ya...I struggled with it at first too but once I got rolling then everything was cool. Stay at it and I'm sure you'll get it. Thanks for dropping in here. Door is always open. Stay well, Corey (2Quills)

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

cool

this was wonderful

Electric Blue

16 years 10 months ago

The Wolf inside my soul

Corey Welcome to neopoet family I have not tried acrostic's yet they seem a bit scarry The spirit you speak of I know of so well this is so beautifully choreographed my friend I never plan to write anything but words tumble out of thin air i cannot help it - it just happens it must be Even in the dark of night his voice is haunting me singing to me in riddles oh he often does so many times there are so many colourful undertones running through this amazing poem Electric Blue so blue

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

Blue

Me two Blue... I mostly write “in the moment” as they say, with whatsoever emotion that I happen to trip across at that particular point in time. I think it took me longer to come up with a title for this piece than it actually did for me to write it. Do you know that I am grateful for your words here? If not, then you should. :)

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