winter

Devoid of love, it's strike is heartless

Cracking withering all that stands

A white marauding delicate friend

— believe, Aug 09, 2009

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Region, Country: sydney,Australia, AUS

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Winter, a time of rest

I like all the seasons and cycles of life. This poem reminds me that Winter is our friend as well as the duality of being a deadly foe if we are not careful to respect her. One small thing: it's should be its (for it's equates to it is) Keep up the good work. Always, Cat

believe

16 years 10 months ago

thanks Cat

I never was good at English,,,,,never, but I hope to be able to communicate with the advice of my friends on this site. this was my entry to the Aug Comp. not sure if its in??? Ray

Jonathan Moore

16 years 10 months ago

It's in but it's four (4) characters too long

Take a look at the following link for a full explanation: http://www.neopoet.com/forum/25844-august-contest-now-open-sorry-delay#comment-107272 Still plenty of time to fix it. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

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