Winter

Scotland - COLD
Me - OLD
Fingers - BLUE
(Nose too)
Birds - MIGRATE
I - STAGNATE
Wait for Spring
Then start again

— Tam the Chanter, Aug 14, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Jonathan Moore

16 years 10 months ago

Well done

A humourous treatment of winter that brought a smile to my face. Oh, and it rhymes and it is less than 100 characters and it's an entry into the August contest. One quick note, I love that the last line hints at rhyming without technically rhyming. It presents no stumble and is a good conclusion, wrapping up the piece when it would have been easier just to end it. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

Tam the Chanter

16 years 10 months ago

winter

I couldn't resist having a go once it dawned on me how short the piece would be. Hope you enjoyed your break (break a few heads?). Always thought John Little no match for Robin Hood, the guy with the bow against big guy with a stick. lol Glad you're as cantankerous as ever, good to hear from you Regards Ian T

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ian

I loved this one its a cheeky look at winter and it works so well *Big Smile*... Regards Jayne :) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Tam the Chanter

16 years 10 months ago

WINTER

tHANKS, jAYNE I'm glad it made you smile. Summer is dying fast here, already the rain is getting colder lol. Kindest Regards Ian

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

I loved it!

very funny! Wow I wish I was in Scotland, Everything I love is in that neck of the woods. Harry Potter, Lord od the Rings, Tam the Chanter.....

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

I loved it!

very funny! Wow I wish I was in Scotland, Everything I love is in that neck of the woods. Harry Potter, Lord of the Rings, Tam the Chanter.....

Tam the Chanter

16 years 10 months ago

green eyes

Glad it gave you pleasure, can't beat a good laugh. The winter isn't far away, here, it skipped through summer and autumn with a carefree whistle ! Kindest Regards Ian T

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