The Same Coloured Blood

I'm burning up on re-entry
my eye gives a sparkle
as i flip a coin to each sentry
They're quite complimentary
so I tip my top hat
and give a flick of my tails
you see
these are great men
men born of fighting and spite
men who relish in hellish intent
evident from the gaps in their pearly whites
i think:
"smile, now smile harder!"
I'll harbor those more harsher thoughts
behind my eyes, like i was taught
we have the same coloured blood
me and you
pumping through our hearts
and i believe with all i am
that I ain't any better than thou art.

— Bosscombat, Aug 16, 2009

Critiques

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Wooooah

There was a bit of spit to this one Matty did someone piss you off ? But i loved it huni this ones really really awesome ... and again you surprise me you always come out with stuff I never expect and I know you LOL scary eh ? ... but good ... woooot just replied back to you on mine ... counting the days till i get down there I can't wait ... Cant wait to catch up again, be well and lots of water and panadol okies ? lol take care of the head darlin ... oh and awesome write lol big hugz and love Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

:O:O:O spotlight Matty wooot

:O:O:O spotlight Matty wooot ;) love you Jayne x x :P "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Diatom Shells

16 years 10 months ago

wonderful!

your rhythm, sir, is outstanding. the flow is smooth and the clever rhymes are really good. and the message in your poem is loud and clear I love it. -diatom shells

Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Thanks heaps hey Glad you liked it :) I'm on my way to check out your work Don't be a stranger BossCombat

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Congrats!!

I enjoy the hardness of equality in this write, the fact to never underestimate. Good write with great power! thanks, Eddie

Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

thanks although

You may have missed the point

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Boss...

I have always looked them in the eye too those that think their stand is greater for I have always known I am no better either we all bleed the same arn't ... aren't but I think I would use ain't enjoyed the read! Richard

Race_9togo

16 years 9 months ago

SSSSSSSSSHHHHHUUUUNNNKKK.....

....and there does cut the razored edge of truth severing all falsehood leaving only clarity Outstanding Boss. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

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