DANCE OF THE MACABRE

You are the Shadow
of my life,you dance the Macabre
holding no promise -however much I crave the light.
Around youI pirouette in small skilful steps famished by fear
afraid to loose my gripand
you.

To glimpse of this love
I stand coercedin its coldness -it towers over me.Beyond this darknessare thoughts that burnand words that still breathebut no life comes from themor
you... BjR 17/08/09

— Bonitaj, Aug 17, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Boni

This is beautiful and very dark... I love it. The images are chilling yet somehow sweet. I tip my heat to you for the awesome write. Favorite lines are: I piroutte in small silent steps fed on fear afraid to loose my grip - and you (piroutte should be pirouette.) Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Gee Cat!

You are a master of THE DARK! So especially nice to get that feedback from you! Much appreciated - the corrections and comments! Take care Boni

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Hey THeo!

Obviously not at your speed though? Thanks for commenting. The hardest is taking the criticism - but that's how we learn and improve! Cheers Boni

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Boni

Beautifully sad write my friend ... but I loved it ... reminds me of the opposite meaning to one of my recent ones but these are my favourite lines Beyond this darkness are thoughts that burn and words that still breathe but no life comes from them or you… they really are some awesome words , probably one of your best for me .. love Jayne "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks Jayne

I get the distinct feeling that this one is 'just for women'? Maybe it's because we "dance to a different drum" or are the only ones who can pirouette? lol Always appreciate your taking the time to stop by! Love Boni

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Boni...

a very passionate piece! I liked it, your word choices didn't leave me feeling bewildered, I connected with it on the first read. enjoyed the read Boni... you are doing great! Richard

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

Hey thanks Richard!

Always good to get the "go ahead" from you! Hope you're keeping well! Boni

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