Hell...

I feel as
though
I have
washed
ashore
damning
myself
to hell
scraping
the edges
clean
of rust
and blood
searching
no more
lying
in the
dust
waiting
for no
one
while
the crowds
become
a flood...

— Fleur MacDonald, Sep 05, 2009

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Country/Region: AUS

Critiques

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Fleur

I know this feeling well my love , are you hungover or sad it could go either way couldnt it with this one , I hope its the former at least you would have gotten some fun out of it lol much love and biggest hugz Jayne x x I am sitting here trying to find a line or lines I like the most , I am sorry I love it all I cannot find just one or two, together its perfect ... beautiful work hun you are reaching and its showing ... :) "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Not sad or hungover

but saturday took it out of me. Spending all night working on the video's and blog, getting it right. There was one post that we both had problems trying to find something nice to say about the work, blah!!! The show was awful, but the artist is a friend and we had to say something. so by the end of finishing I was fucked in the head and felt really drained and still do!! Once Jimmy had left I took stock and this poem came out all at once, so that's it! Glad you liked it anyway, I know I do! :)fleur

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Fleur

Does sound like u are feeling a bit down. You always take us to a place of interest whether good or bad, and this one is as touching as the rest. I too love the words you have commanded. Wish u well. Lyz. x

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks lyz

for your kind words, you are becoming to me a special treasure and I wish you well. :)fleur xxx

Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

eggshellant!! theres not much i can say that hasnt been said already other than to say put a smile on ya dial! ♣

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Just had some

dark chocolate and feeling much better now, thankyou. It's been all work and no play with my new website, but it must be done. This poem came from a hard nights work on saturday, just before I went to bed, it was on paper in 1 min! Glad you like it :)fleur

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