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Like a stain in the brain


 

 

How could I forget 

the feeling like kneeling 

down on the grass

to study a butterfly or a fine leaf

even though its so brief 

when they flutter away

their colours remain 

like a stain in the brain

and our feelings flow free

the wing beats of colour re echo about

in the belfry of sounds so soft

so loving and true not purple or blue

like sunshine in sunbeams

awaking our dreams

this life is so wondrous

so magic 

it seems to be real

 

the feel of your heart beats 

is close to me now

when I see the butterfly 

stopped on your brow

to caress your fine face

for me now full of grace

showing my love is forever

no never

will I tire of your eyes

I perspire at their sight 

in the light

of your room

you stir in my womb

on the loom of life's boon

now I swoon.

 


— Nordic cloud, Sep 09, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Love should....

Love should be insatiable. It is one of the few things in this world that we can never have too much of. You write so beautifully of love. I thought that maybe 'perspire' might be a poor choice of words, but I truly can't think of another word that would fit! Looking again, I see that another word might change the tone, and now believe that IT IS the proper word in the proper place. Sir Gee.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Oh Sir Gee

Exactly my quandary and yet it was there and I too have no alternative it isn't ugly to perspire either its just the way we tend to look at the word or experience the word, having had ad after ad after ad. shoved down our gullets, words change their meanings and become vulgar where once they were not, is it not so Sir? Anyone else is welcome to try? Love from your Q. Ann of the north.
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ann H

You have a love in your heart that extends to these pages.You see beauty in life and your love of nature drips into this poem that is as perfect as the picture you have put into my mind. Love Lyz XX
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Oh what a beautiful comment,

Oh what a beautiful comment, full of understanding and love too, only those that love can understand others that love; but we all love in our own 'sweet' ways and doing so make this world a place worth living in. Thank you dear you for your nice comment, with love and more from Ann
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Ann you always inspire me ,

Ann you always inspire me , more than you know , I am in awe and this ones just beautiful, transfixed by this pane you transend your own words and take us away, thank you love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 9 months ago

My Dear Ann

Ann, This is such a beautiful poem, I just dont know what to say. I love it. Greeneyes

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