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A Feeble Minds Fabrication
She thumps me on the shoulder.
In hopes I will look at her, standing beside me,
And she says in sweet adorable tone,
“Of all the people in this life,
Not one of them like me,”
I glance, she’s grinning widely,
Only her eyes illustrating fear.
I whisper “don’t think about it.”
I pretend not to hear what she has to say next.
Her skin smells of sweetly scented sex,
As we intertwine our necks,
We hold each other,
One against the frost
We swing gently
Back… and forth
Each others aid, each of us fearing loss.
I can sense her quivering synchronizing with my shivering.
Abruptly she pulls away, and everything’s cold,
I feel repulsed by the rift, the sudden wafting hole,
The devastating isolation,
I open my eyes and come to the realization
She is gone…
A feeble minds fabrication,
Brought to me through song
Every time I think I’ve found a way out
I’m proven hideously wrong.
I just want there to be someone,
Someone, Somewhere
Anyone, anywhere.
Who doesn’t make me feel this way.
Forgotten.
Undeserving.
Alone.
Critiques
Geezer
16 years 8 months ago
Alonest is...
Bosscombat
16 years 8 months ago
:)
Fleur MacDonald
16 years 8 months ago
truely
Bosscombat
16 years 8 months ago
:)
Kailashana
16 years 8 months ago
I for one hated it. It’s
Bosscombat
16 years 8 months ago
you can only what? ♣
Kailashana
16 years 8 months ago
Your Avatar will give you a
lyz
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Boss
Bosscombat
16 years 8 months ago
:)
Seren
16 years 8 months ago
Matty I must have forgot to
Bosscombat
16 years 8 months ago
ahhh herro
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