Lampy (or Limpy)

My lamp
has died
how sad
that is
has fallen
into a
heap
a droopy neck
can't stand
up straight
by itself

can't paint
without it
guess
will need
to buy
another
electrics still
work
just fine
a plastic
thingy snapped
how could
that
be
oh yeah
mass produced
in a foreign
country
where problems
always arise
and are
never fixed

well
it blew
up today
it's
really
screwed
or just
come
unscrewed
and it
will need
to be
replaced...

— Fleur MacDonald, Oct 07, 2009

About the Author

Country/Region: AUS

Critiques

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

hello dear Fleur

Once again a brilliant write. Nice to see you are back in the swing. A few typos dear, 4th line, should it be- it instead of is, 2nd stanza, 5th line, buy instead of but. That's it, u must be tired or in a hurry. I feel sorry for your lamp and the fact that u need it to paint. Poor soul. Well I enjoyed your write very much, well done. Love from Lyz. XX

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 8 months ago

Fourth line fine the way it is

thank you for picking up on my hurried spelling error's, if you don't no one will. I thank you dear fleur

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest darlin' Fleur

I cannot see the typos soooo ... they aint there ok ... I am a little inebriated LMAO you better love me :) I am having a drink for my birthday if the docters knew I would be in deep pooooooo but they dont .. and sorry but I need to let it all hang loose rotlmfao annnnnnnnnnnnd :) I am going now before I make a total dick of myself though as soon as I started typing that happened lmfao !!! OK love you, awesome poem ... send me your address I will send you a bitching new lamp for your birthday belated though it is lmfao !! love you hun mwah love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 8 months ago

Cheers from me

for I am also quite drunk, just back from an opening, having trouble keeping my eyes open, thankyou my sweet sister, hope you are feeling better and fitter. Must crash my sweet, I have a non western classic coming up next. :)fleur

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