An hour with my Two pups

It is an hour of life is too happy in my life

This hour I spent with them is useful

My happy with currencies are tempting to do sins

This happy and indulging in their’s love is

really an excellent experience

Sixty minutes ,I felt a new life and a new world of love

They licked my hands and face with love

Pleased me and made me to travel in the world of Paradise

Entering in to the World of paradise

Possible only after death

But these lovable innocent pups

Have presented Me that Heavenly experience

To a bowl of milk

They taught me a great lesson in love

Their pure love and innocence

tempts my mind to live with loyal to our father with love

as the Pups with me in this world

— SAKTHEEE2007, Oct 09, 2009

Critiques

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Just wanted you to know I have read this...

But will come back later to comment. I am really tired right now. Gee

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

It does my heart...

good, to see how much you love your dogs. I think that the comparison of love and loyality, to the love and comfort of God the creator, is admiralable. You have to hang in there Sakkkk, and not be tempted to sin, and if these two pups are what is helping you do that, I love you and them all the more. I wish there was some way to tell you how proud I am of you for the love you are giving back to them. They will be loyal beyond belief for the love you have given them. Just as you have to be loyal to your God, for the love he sends through these pups. Keep hanging in there and doing the right thing, I am sure that you will come through your present difficulties, Your friend, Gee

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