lyz

Oct 25, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Signature Kisses.*

Over the years
you've spoilt me
and tried to make
life more surreal.

In exchange from
within my heart,
I pledge to you
This special seal.

Signature kisses
a contract of love,
to let you know
just how I feel.

And with it come
hugs of approval
to finalise this
special deal.

— lyz, Oct 25, 2009

Critiques

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Nana

awwww Lyz this is just beautiful darlin ... the poignancy of speaking like a corporate boss LOL yet undoing that impression with hugs and kisses ... yep you nearly made me cry ... beautifully done ... Love and biggest hugs Aunty Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Jayne

Thank you. I will catch up tomorrow sometime. Love Lyz. Xx

Tony Udo

16 years 7 months ago

Signature

Artfully,(and cleverly) done,(with a hint of the cute).

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Tony

Hi again. Thanks for reading, I will hopefully catching up with mine tomorrow. Love Lyz. XX

Calliope

16 years 7 months ago

I have to agree

This is cute,i love ,just love this title and theme, fav lines... Signature kisses a contract of love, to let you know just how I feel. Brava! Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lacy

Thank you. It is an oldie and I am glad you enjoyed. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX PS, you have posted a couple of gems and I have enjoyed them very much. Glad you are back. Thanks.

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

what you find so special about a surreal life,

Over the years you’ve spoilt me  and tried to make life more surreal. In exchange from within my heart,  I pledge to you my special seal...........(I pledge you my special seal ?) Signature kisses, a contract of love,  to let you know just how I feel. And with it comes hugs of approval  to finalise this special, signature kisses deal. (Come (noS) hugs...and cut out the last signature kisses..special deal.) I find the last line a little long in the rhythm of this poem. And here I have reshaped it and I hope you don't mind dear Lyz I feel the shape of the whole poem could be different and then it will be more complete, more succinct, and have a sweet charm of wholeness that like an Eastern poem says it all in a few words. Not absolutely sure what you find so special about a surreal life, or what you mean by it, its up to our imaginations perhaps? Well thats just me Lyz and I send you my love Ann of Norway.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ann

Thank you. Is it ok now? As for a surreal life, well, I just want a little peace from thoughts and everyday dramas. Too much baggage I carry from a young age and I am still looking for that inner peace I suppose. Too long to go into, so yes, leave it to the imaginations. Thank you, Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Now its perfect—ly

Now its perfect---ly deightful and flowing and dancing and growing on me as I trip along singng the song and while I do, I see into the window of your mind's room and there you are makng this parchment letter using the old fashioned seal, the sealing wax is still hot, as you press the final decorative joint anagram onto the back of it. This is now very good dear sweet natured and loving Lyz. From your friend Ann in Norway

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Thank you dear Ann for the advice, greatly appreciated. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

signature kisses

enda, patrick collins. hi lyz lovely wee poem tender would be the word i would use

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Thanks for popping in on this wee one. Love to you and yours Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

signature kisses

enda, patrick collins. hi lyz lovely wee poem tender would be the word i would use

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Two comments the same, wow. lol. Except for the stars, one lot a 5 this one a 4, lol. Make up your mind, lol. Love to you and yours Lyz. XX

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 7 months ago

You gone all fluffy..

Aaawwwwwwwwww Lyz, You gone all fluffy on me! This is almost like a lover's pact or business deal with a rubber stamp X on it but you meld it beautifully and give your heart and charm to this piece with ease... and land a big fat wet one on everyone's cheek as you you squeeze us tight. How lovely.. spread the love everywhere! Lovable and a huggable! Dale :)

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Dale

Glad to see you back. I wish I was fluffy, and I love your comment. I send a big fat wet one to you. Lol. Thanks mate. Love to you and yours. Lyz. Xx

Idlemindwondering

16 years 7 months ago

A beautiful testimonial

this is very sweet and made more so by its history; any two can find infatuation in the beginning but to still be reeling many years later; That is a testimony. much love ken OH, what does "One more try on commenting," mean?

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ken

Lol. I have tried to comment on poems and each time it either would not post or all would seize up and I would have to turn off the comp and start again. Frustrating. Over it. Or I could not get on the site. Oh well back again. Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed this. Love Lyz. Off to try again. Lol. XX

Idlemindwondering

16 years 7 months ago

Yay I hear ya

I log on to a different site to comment there between windows here; but I am hoping the upgrades in Dec. will fix many issues on this site.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hi again

I hope you are right, I am ready to chuck this computer. lol. I hate having to do something over and over. Not to worry. It is a turn off though. lol. Love to you and yours, Lyz. XX

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lyz:

This is very beautiful poem, a sacrificial contract, an elevated symbol of faithfulness over the years. Well done! Sincerely, Hugo

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Hugo

Thank you for dropping by and I am glad u like. I am having trouble so I am glad that the reply to ken got there, so hopefully yours does too, lol. Thank you again dear man, Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Take five

Take five!!! ( Couldn't add them to my reply so here they are instead dear Lyz. ) Love Ann again.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ann

Thank you again.It is taking me a long time to read, reply and comment. The comp is playing up and it is really slow. Driving me crazy. Lol. Thank you again, Lyz. XX

Stuart Reiss

16 years 7 months ago

This is a lovely most

This is a lovely most beautiful poem which really touched me...Lovely write Liz its really really sweet. Got my nom for this best regards Stu

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Stuart

I am glad you like this. I wrote it a long time ago. I was never a gushy girl and there is reasons for that and when you get someone who spoils you and gives a lot of themselves when u are not used to that, well, this was the only way I could give something back. In a poem. Later on though I must admit, I wrote a sexy one for him and mate it has been years and I found it the other day folded and dusty in an old wallet, I laughed. He wont throw it, but I will. LOL. Thank you and I hope this thing does not play up so I can catch up. Love Lyz. XX

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 7 months ago

art of love is made a fine

art of love is made a fine art in this poem. lovely. shan

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you

dear Shan, how are you. I am glad you liked this. It is different I kow, but I am glad you liked it. Thanks again dear Shan, Love to you and the family. XX Lyz.

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