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T E A R S in S H E A R



sheath coupling
we fumble fluid
like flights

and echo lights
glitter bright on the rough cut
of plaster

here are the lip prints
oxotic in grease oils
a moan written

three fingers moist
stretched like a wave report
caught in the blade of
gold dipped sun

dripping with exertion
the sweat of time hangs
tilting

if I caught livid
curve
in arc erotica

svelte eyes
refresh the tears
walking
down the plush
flesh
of your sadness

holding intimate
to the lean of your throat
the swallow
juxtposition

and beads that capture
bright pinnacles
of heavens light

we have written
salvaged chapters
in macro resolution

dust now where the moon
fills bowls of dried
husk deals

here the rounded dainty
bone of your wrist
petite mon

— orgami, Nov 13, 2009

Critiques

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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Wizard with words

I feel a sweet scent of sexual activity going on here, or is it harvest time, lol. You always get me with the pretty words,lol. I love the read and I think I will take away from it, a love poem. sorry if I am wrong, but you know me,lol. Love to all, Lyz. XX
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hello

hi there there is more to this than meets the eye i will have to return and try and figure it out when i have more time chat then,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ziggy but i do like it indeed
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 7 months ago

Tears in Shear

Steven Wow steamy or what. I love your vulcabulary the words are amazing. Tender and exotic full of emotions I knew this once maybe someday I will again blue
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Tears in shear...

I don't know how you do it! Each time I think I have seen the best that you can do, you give me something else to think about. Your command of vocabulary is extraordinary. I never know what surprises you are about to deliver, only that they are there! ~ Gee
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bunnymug

16 years 7 months ago

adulation

i would suggest changing "petite mon" to "ma petite" (my little one)... just a thought. "we fumble fluid" "a moan written" "walking down the plush flesh of your sadness" your words take my breath away.
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orgami

16 years 7 months ago

Obsessional mania and depression (sans alcohol)

I like "ma petitie" although the love interesting of my life had been great collisions and not the run of the ordinary (those turned me down) U Tube videos and music support my desire and need the hungry wolf the sad ache Lonely Jeckyl in a still moment happy now with stability meds on time meetings kept eating sleeping order and yet the flames burn at night in ruins the wild runs Thanks for comments Bunny i am honoured
arja

arja

16 years 5 months ago

…its a different mood that

...its a different mood that you put your readers into, its really something worth thinking about indeed, the way you put words all together to come up with a piece worth pondering...

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