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MD
Mrs Dalloway
Dec 06, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Visiting my childhood

My bare feet

On the jade of summer

Recalling the years

When my body was shorter

hair, longer

My mind simpler

thoughts wiser

When this garden was my forest

Where friendships flourished

In the freedom of owning time

When I could dwindle in the security

Of a loving parent protecting me from the hurt I obliviously stepped into

Dolls accompanying the promise of children and a sacred wedding one day

The territory that defined me

The certainty of who I was

And of who I will become

I recall it being bigger

Now it transformed into a remembrance

Of the me that I had forgotten

A garden filled with ambitions

That remained intangible

Trading a garden for a concrete jungle

Where I am neither the child

Nor the mother

Merely a solitaire shadow

— Mrs Dalloway, Dec 06, 2009
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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Such a beautiful &

Such a beautiful & truth-filled coming-of-age poem. Thank you. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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magics02

16 years 6 months ago

Childhood

hello friend such a beautiful piece. When you work out the issues of childhood things that happened to you or against you ..you must go to that child and dig it all out of the box to release it once and for all. I recently have been going thru this my own self and many suppressed things came to the surface. As this work can be painful and hurtful when you open up to it and deal with it to release it once and for all you will have healed your soul. You can relive that chilhood again, gain her back, forgive those that harmed you and blow it to the wind, You are a child of the universe and once you acknowledge the stuff in the black box and it opens one at a time you will finally be free of all you held in for so many years...at least this is what I have been going through. My wriitngs have brang this to the surface and I can wake up a different, better woman for the work that I am doing for myself. This is only my opinion, you may have other ways of dealing with your childhood and your feelings that have been pushed down for a long time.. Time to heal, time to love, time to forgive and live your life that God has intended for you as he is truly guiding me more these days then ever before. Perhaps I may have had HIM there for a long time also and know that HE is such an important aspect in my life today. HE watches and He is there guiding your very person and feelings since HE knows all. magics02
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

*have brang*? the correct

*have brang*? the correct usage of language is has brought... And HE is S/HE. Lord, save me from male Gods. *HE'S* brought every human misery to earth. Respectfully, ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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magics02

16 years 6 months ago

brought

My writings have brought this to the surface, is that better now, and thank you for that. I always had that problem in english class lol And HE is S/HE. what where you trying to interpret with this line magics02

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