I WILL NOT FALL FOR THAT

I WILL NOT FALL FOR THAT Niger Delta, a struggle started, not todayKing Frederick William Koko led warriorsTo General Goldie’s garrison at AkassaHe was sent on exile after his captureOh! I need not say, same story, for othersOba Ovarenwem, King Jaja of OpoboNana of Itshekeri, the nostalgic reminiscenceIn far away land, my people, my kingdom The land lay wasted without the helmsmenFree for all comers, strange were their waysWith gifts of gun powder and hot drinksMinerals and produce were shipped awayTo keep fancy foreign factories from failingThis in turn served their mercantilist goalsThe hand that powered Goldie’s gunboatsThrough the creeks, now sits in Aso Rock You know what; I will not fall for thatWith my eyes closed, I can unmask youJoint Task Force, a resurgence of Frontier ForceIn the creeks of Niger, replays the Nembe siegeThe economy suffers, people groan and dieLaudable amnesty for militants and war lordsLike our exiled leaders of ancient kingdomsThe land is free for trade in gold, it is the oil…

— t. reflexion, Dec 07, 2009

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Critiques

Geezer

16 years 5 months ago

Falling...

Another story. I understand the need to tell it, but most people aren't interested in just another story. If you do it with enough style, people will read it and ask for more from the person who tells the true stories in rhyme or at least poetic rythm. I know your facts must be true, but do it with more style. ~ Geezer

t. reflexion

16 years ago

Yours...

Your comment is the type I like very much. I have been trying to write poems, but always come out with stories. May be, because English is my second Language. Please, can you give me some guidelines to write better? I am a story teller and I have bags full of them. Your assistance will be appreciated and I am looking forward to it. May the new year bring you happiness and prosperity. T.

Geezer

16 years ago

I noticed...

That it took you a long time to answer this comment. i hope that your land is more at peace, and that the time it took to answer wasn't because you have not been able to respond. Have you been practicing your english? I would suggest that you read as much poetry as you can. Story telling is an ancient art, and there is nothing wrong with that. I know that your background most likely has this kind of telling and re-telling, for hundreds of years. If at all possible, you should read epic poems. Free verse might be the style most suited to you. Do you have access to an english-library? If not, look around here, and try to find narrative-style poems. I might suggest that you read some of the war poems that I have written: Britain Rules George 1812 Powerful Forces I'm not suggesting they are the best, but I think they will give an idea of what type of poems to look for. I greatly appreciate that you have asked me for help, and if I can be of more help, just ask. I wish you great success, ~ Geezer

t. reflexion

16 years ago

A big thanks...

For your suggestions, I will read some of your works and hope to gain as I read them. Once more, thank you and best wishes. T.

Geezer

16 years ago

You are so...

welcome, I do not mean to suggest that my works, are the only things you should look at, but they do represent the type of work, that you are doing. I used actual facts from historical events, and wove narratives from fictional characters that I created. You have great potential, and I can see that you understand the basic idea. Good luck with your endevours, I will defintely be looking for great stuff from you. ~ Geezer

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