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GRiM
Dec 07, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Suicide Silence

My eyes seek new death,
Black as pale; i sail, i sail,
Without a real breath.
— GRiM, Dec 07, 2009
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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 5 months ago

Hey grim

Short and to the point, not over done. Like a breath of wind and it's over. First things first- capitalize "I" when referring to yourself. Proper grammar, doesn't look so amateur or slangish. Poem has a strange, almost darkly nostalgic feel to it. Reminds me of a graveyard or somewhere spooky without being cliche. You keep it simple. I like that. Peace~~~~

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