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Dec 21, 2009
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IN ALL ODDS
Living to die when due is a tale confirmed
But dying in debt is that which all protest
Dying in debt equals life unfulfilment
If rock and trees were to be obstacles
Hammers and saws would be of help
All odds walks and breathes like thee
Breaking through now seems fighting oneself
If all minds and act could act to others just as for one self
Then our world won't seems thus
When water meets not our thirst
We strive to grease the dryness of our throat
Once thirst is mend with grain to chew
Thought of our past discomfort is forgone
Thoughts of likes meeting on stands is forseen
But dying in debt is that which all protest
Dying in debt equals life unfulfilment
If rock and trees were to be obstacles
Hammers and saws would be of help
All odds walks and breathes like thee
Breaking through now seems fighting oneself
If all minds and act could act to others just as for one self
Then our world won't seems thus
When water meets not our thirst
We strive to grease the dryness of our throat
Once thirst is mend with grain to chew
Thought of our past discomfort is forgone
Thoughts of likes meeting on stands is forseen
— tsbabadepoet, Dec 21, 2009
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seabhac
16 years 5 months ago
Great poem
weirdelf
16 years 5 months ago
Yes, a very good, well expressed, intelligent poem.
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