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Dec 28, 2009
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Hungry Jack in a Blue Pontiac.
The summer of ninety four,
a redhead drove into town.
Her name rhymed with pearl,
Now what was it?, Lurl.
She arrived in a flash
blue Pontiac.
The local copper Jove,
had been doing the dirty
with this redhead, Lurl.
But alas, he died.
Now Lurl came to claim
her inheritance.
Jove had nothing of value
except his faithful large,
hungry Dane, Jack.
It was payback,
the family agreed.
.
Lurl swore and
took Jack out of spite.
Not wanting to get nothing.
Greed replaced remorse.
Jack in the back of the Pontiac,
chewed the upholstery
happily and hungrily,
as they drove off.
So I suppose,
the moral of this tale is,
do not hunger with greed,
you might be chewed up
and spat out like the only
valued possession you own.
Like these,
a dog named Jack,
or a blue pontiac.
Lurls and Joves,
greatest possessions.
Just one of lifes lessons.
a redhead drove into town.
Her name rhymed with pearl,
Now what was it?, Lurl.
She arrived in a flash
blue Pontiac.
The local copper Jove,
had been doing the dirty
with this redhead, Lurl.
But alas, he died.
Now Lurl came to claim
her inheritance.
Jove had nothing of value
except his faithful large,
hungry Dane, Jack.
It was payback,
the family agreed.
.
Lurl swore and
took Jack out of spite.
Not wanting to get nothing.
Greed replaced remorse.
Jack in the back of the Pontiac,
chewed the upholstery
happily and hungrily,
as they drove off.
So I suppose,
the moral of this tale is,
do not hunger with greed,
you might be chewed up
and spat out like the only
valued possession you own.
Like these,
a dog named Jack,
or a blue pontiac.
Lurls and Joves,
greatest possessions.
Just one of lifes lessons.
— lyz, Dec 28, 2009
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Critiques
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
Dear LyzYou need to put the
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Hello
Orphani
16 years 5 months ago
Did you say Lurl. I think I
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
But before I go
Orphani
16 years 5 months ago
I usually post mine raw
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Barry
Geezer
16 years 5 months ago
Great Dane...
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Gee!!!!!
Geezer
16 years 5 months ago
Just wanted to show...
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Yumm
seabhac
16 years 5 months ago
Just desserts
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Liz
Worldwide Freeride
16 years 5 months ago
Pump the pedal to the metal...
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Dale
deelilah
16 years 5 months ago
Hi Lyz
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Hello Deelilah
ziggy
16 years 5 months ago
HELLO
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Oh Ziggy
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
Darlin I just noticed I was
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Hello, how is ya?
CyberSpace
16 years 5 months ago
Liked the story and the
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Thanks and you make me laugh you pair
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
Liar !!! you were out
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
I am still smiling
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
When I opened that Jelly
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Aw how nice
Seren
16 years 5 months ago
Thanks Liz … and you know
2 Quills
16 years 5 months ago
A valuable lesson indeed
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Thank you
hugo la rosa
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Lyz:
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
You sneaky bugger. Where have you been.
Candlewitch
16 years 5 months ago
Dear Lyz
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Goat!
R.M.Shanmugam
16 years 5 months ago
more skill is seen in this
lyz
16 years 5 months ago
Thank you dear Shan
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