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The Lost Cause Tree

it's breathtaking
how fast it comes and goes
and longs to pass
and the things that tie together
are the only things
that you remember
so climb to the top 
of the lost cause tree
where you can see for miles
all the things you cannot be
  
— zach, Dec 29, 2009

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Region, Country: Quebec, Canada

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broken_skye

16 years 5 months ago

Very Nice

You might want to work on your format a little but other than that very good.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Zach,

have a very happy New Year! I really like this poem, but couldn't help feeling it fell a little short. It seems to me to be the perfect final stanza for a really great poem. Do you think you could expand? Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Zach

I agree with Nina on this one ... I would expand this a tad more its a brilliant ending ... and deserves to have more body to it kind regards Jayne x x

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