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Lunegirl
Dec 30, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Slave

Fizzling, frazzled, leash lash
staple skin to floor off my back
searing sun witness hopes death
— Lunegirl, Dec 30, 2009
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docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 5 months ago

Between the two of us....

...we have a bit of a "theme" going, here. I liked the way your poem read, outloud. Good job ! Haiku poetry can be "tricky". "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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Lunegirl

16 years 5 months ago

Thankyou, Its definately not

Thankyou, Its definately not easy to grapple with ; ). Theme? as in Haiku is being written alot on here at the moment or my writing is all similar? have a good day vix

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