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"I was just a lie"

You told me you loved me, you told me you cared.I trusted you, you ripped out my heart.You told me you loved me, you told me you cared.I trusted you, you ripped out my heart. Left abandon and scared. I was there for you over and over again, even towards the end.Yes you were there but when I needed you the most you were nowhere to be found.Accuse me of cheating, accuse me of lies but we both know the truth it was you who lied.I can't believe you, just threw it all away.Didn’t that one day mean anything to you, or am I just another scar upon your wrist.I was just another heart to break. As I once laid upon your chest you whispered in my ear I love you forever. It was just another lie that you told.You abandoned me the next day you just threw it all away.Blame me, tell me that I lied, and tell me I cheated, that I’m just a whore.But you were the one with another girl. I loved you, you said you loved me.You said you’d always be there, that you  cared.I loved you, you said you loved me.I trusted you, you stabbed me.I forgave you; you turned it around on me.You said you’d always be there, that you cared. Tell me my mistakes; make me feel like it’s my fault; make me feel like I threw it away.But we both know the truth; you couldn’t handle that someone actually cared.You gave up, I kept trying.The yelling, the lying, wonder why we were dying. She ripped your heart out, she said she cared.You trusted her, she stabbed you, Abandoned you.Now how does it feel? 
— reichley, Dec 31, 2009

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Region, Country: Indiana, USA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by Edgar Allan Poe , Emily Dickinson and Shakespeare

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 4 months ago

Obviously a rather emotional

Obviously a rather emotional subject- the emotions resonate through this, anger, sorrow, bitterness. I bet it felt great to get all this off your chest. Content wise, I have nothing to critique. Maybe a bit of editing, get rid of some unnecessary words and such. I would like to see this broken up into stanzas and maybe some of the lines shortened and broken into shorter lines. It would look less like a ramble and more poem-like. Great twist at the end- as my grandpa always said, what goes around comes around. These people get what they deserve someday. Peace and light
reichley

reichley

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks for the feedback, and

Thanks for the feedback, and yea it sure did feel good to get if off my chest,the wonders of poetry do us all some good.

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