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Monster

Hear my words
and run away
don't trust the shadows
and never stray

The monster will take you up
and make you his toy
a mindless puppet
and never again will you fill joy

He will tell you he can help you
and make your spirit soar
don't go into his house
your trapped when he shuts the door

Don't let him tell you he's the answer
he is satin in every form
don't trust the lies that he will tell
for then he will unleash a storm

Don't let him pull you under
there's no hero once you die
just keep away from the monster
and don't believe his lie
— Silent_Rain, Jan 08, 2010

Critiques

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U K Atiyodi

16 years 5 months ago

Monster

The monster has satanic intentions. He represents the modern business man without scruples. He is a cheat adorned by deceptive ads. Beware of this monster
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Silent_Rain

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Indi! Im glad that

Thanks, Indi! Im glad that you liked it!! Thanks for giving me the rating!! Peace and love, ~Rain~
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Dark_Death

16 years 5 months ago

i like it, reminds me of a

i like it, reminds me of a few of different dreams i had lately. i agree with indiscretionate it is a good rhythm. and its different than what i usually see, good job
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Silent_Rain

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks...

Thanks, Im glad you like it! ~Rain~

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