runaway

I just wanna run away.
you say i'll make it,
but i cant take it,
and the truth is,
what we all can see,
...no one would run after me...

— Dark.Poetress, Jan 11, 2010

Critiques

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 5 months ago

life offers us challenges to conquer

Ahh yes, I think we have all felt that "no one would miss me" feeling from time to time and that urge to just run away, but life offers us challenges to conquer and sometimes strength comes in simply staying. Technical stuff: "I" should always be capitalized. and an Ellipsis at the end of a line is always only three dots. ... A very emotive write that will relate to many. Thank you for sharing this one. ~Pamela

Dark.Poetress

16 years 4 months ago

kool thx for the advice

kool thx for the advice pamela,your right I also know ppl who have felt that feeling along with me though,well thx

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