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What of Infidelity

 What of  Infidelity

A moment’s infidelity

A life time’s torture

Any human beings’
mind
can go astray

At any time
of any day
At any hour
Any moment
by false sense
of display

On someone else’s behalf
We foreplay

Come some one

Please do come by
and
there you go flat

on the sly,
afterwards
it is like just that

You loved to lie
on the mat

That is all
twas to it

We both enjoyed it

Bit by bit
bit by bit
bit by bit

didn't we!!!

 

 

— loved, Jan 13, 2010

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Country/Region: ROU

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 5 months ago

Interestingly accurate

with strains of Hafiz/Rumi in it's tone. Just one correction I would make is to the last line - which is in the present tense! Should correlate with the rest of the PAST tense- so try 'DIDN"T WE?" Cheers Bonita j
loved

loved

16 years 5 months ago

observation

thanks for your corrective views glsd u liked and commented pl do read some more i have posted thanks again
loved

loved

16 years 5 months ago

five stars

wow five stars thanks do read some more i love you for the stars u give
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

I'm glad you took Boni's advice on the last line as that smooths out your brilliant poem. Love, Cat
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

thabks

..u liked it i am amenable to all good suggestions thanks
SH

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

very nice Loved!

And do you know what i say,"better to be alone than with the wrong person" take care. shirley harrison
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

gr8888888888888

views but one needs some nocturnal activity tooo ? what??????//

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