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Taking off this makeup

My problems are getting deep,

Let me explain,

One day your ok,
the next your far away from it all,

You’re running from the world,

You can’t cope,

Feels like my problems have gotten me by the throat,

There’s no note,

There’s no tune,

It’s all just silent,

The crime scene is covered I’m my blood that’s violent,

It’s so raw,

Now the enemy is walking out the door,

Once again,

Knowing that my body will never mend,

And will I ever send the message that he caused,

Shall we pause……? Never,

Cause this shit will never get better,

Just like you could never understand this letter,

That I write,

Always will despite what’s going on,

The reason why I got here to write this song,

So long it took me,

To compromise with my lies,
All along,

Thinking it was me who did wrong,

 Before I wake up,
Taking off this makeup,

 

 

— Silentvoice777, Jan 14, 2010

Critiques

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Mizblak buttafly

16 years 4 months ago

the meaning is there, the

the meaning is there, the rhythm is alittle off, but that could be a gud thing if that is how you want the reader to be put off alittle, confusion like the poem asking wat road should i travel next? I got it some may not, if that is how you like it leave it alone, but if you want the masses to get it you may want to tighten it up a bit with the flow.

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