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NOBOBY WANTS TO HEAR!

If only half of you knew,
Cause all the other half choose not to go where i do,
Choose to go where there's only few,

There's not many there,
Well there is,
But most of them still live in despair,

Still not able to share,
There horror,
And the shame that they have to wear,

But who will care?
Thats what they always think,
And with nobody to turn to,

They just turn to drink,
They turn to drugs,
To make the pain go away,

They think not living today,
They will make a better way,
A better day to come,

So its not fun,
To see somebody lose when they had to run,

Run upon there horrible life choice,
So without getting help
they just sit they with there silent voice.
— Silentvoice777, Jan 17, 2010

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poewriter58

16 years 4 months ago

Silent

First stanza total confusion, who is going where? there's no many there( did you mean so)? I see where you are going with this, but the way it is written is more than a rant then a poem. I'd like to see this re written with more thought given to the writing as you have an excellent subject to write about I'll look for a re write or some changes Chrys
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Silentvoice777

16 years 4 months ago

There

Sorry its ment to be 'there's not many there' its hard to put down in words what im talking about because its such a raw topic, THERE meaning in my poem are people in the same situation thats been abused and no one wonts to talk about it and pretends it dosnt happen when it does and people have to hear whats going on. Im not that good at writing poetry, ive always writin songs as in raps but i just started puting them on this site. so i appreciate the comments it helpes me out! thx for your comment.
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point.of.redemption

16 years 4 months ago

chose explicitly ur poems to

chose explicitly ur poems to read 'cause i love ur sujbects! ur simply real

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