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WHEN WE BUILD AGAIN

WHEN WE BUILD AGAIN Before the eclipse turned our day into nightWhen our forebears came together, years agoTo build a small house, but big enough to contain allThey sang the first song of freedom for our familiesThe roof, like a bird with wings, tilted skywardA large eagle flew across, never before seen by menBut, as they gazed upward, they saw a falcon’s eyes Blocks and stones were brought to the siteFrom the quarry, through the winding creeksTo the plot of land acquired on Jones’ AvenueWith seasoned artisans and experts sort forThe workforce had hopes, high, as tall as IrokoTo leave a lasting legacy to the coming offspringA module of hob and spoke was adoptedWith Abuja, a unified core city, the centre The builders assembled for ground-breakingThe chief work man changed the original planPolluted and infected the timbers and calibersSham took a shovel, mixed cement with soapAnd weakened the very foundation from the startSo when they laboured hard to the lintel levelO! This house has fallen from the other end With the base pillar of truth compromisedNot as laid out in planned pyramid of idealsIntended to root out distorted rotten elementsAlong with falsehood, greed and insincerityThe state house is on the brink of caving inFear lurks in the minds of men aroundOn what will happen, when we build again...






 
— t. reflexion, Jan 19, 2010

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Hey T

Wow man, you absolutely nailed it, hope and pride of freedom stomped on by stupidity and greed. I can't help thinking that you had your nation's current presidential woes in mind when you were writing this. Well done, an awesome write. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

16 years 4 months ago

The comparison here is...

That the poem takes on the life of a small company and compares it with the state of the nation. The present political situation only reaffirms the realities in this piece. It was written about eight or nine months ago. Thank you for the comments and best wishes. Trex.
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lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Dear T

Bastards. The very thought and yet I know that it is. Our government housing can sometimes be just a bodge job too, You have written powerfully and I am impressed. Love Lyz. XX
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you

Watching the very institution you helped to build destroyed by falsehooh, greed and insincerity is disheartening. Thank you for the comments. Best wishes. T.

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