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I like the sentiment your poem offers, but it needs some work to more as affective to the reader as it is to you personally. For one thing, there is too much repetition... walking away, laughing, all strong emotive images but could be accomplished with other words so as to not be repetitive and still carry the poem and the reader through with a certain flair. The other thing is the format, and it might could stand some punctuation to indicate the places where you stop, pause for affect. Read it aloud, then indicate your read by the way you write it down so as to allow the reader to catch your voice. Another thing, for me, the title is too long and could be more affective if it were something other than a line directly from the work, something shorter but still relative. first line problem... Doesn't matter ever did (never) Doesn't matter, never did. merely suggestions from one old man Richard