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Silent_Rain
Feb 08, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Locked Away

Rain drops
there falling
I can hear them

Oh, I wish I could see them

But I can't
I'm trapped inside these white walls
with no way out

But I can hear the rain

Oh, I wish I could run in it
and be free once more
but I can't

I can't leave this room

There's to much pain and sorrow
and I got tired of it all
so now I'm locked away

Longing for the rain
— Silent_Rain, Feb 08, 2010
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Silent_Rain

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Indi

Thanks once agian for your support! ~Rain~
xena465

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

I agree with Indi

Your poem reflects a misierable existance. If this is you who feels like this, try writing a poem about the wonders of nature. `Look and you shall seek`. If you can find the poet in you that sees the good, even though life may a present be bad. You'll find your soul and write possitively about what you're inner self seeks. Sincerely Rosina xena465
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Silent_Rain

16 years 4 months ago

I have writen a few poems

I have writen a few poems about nature, most of my writing is to vent and write out my feelings, it helps, and I love it... If you'd like you should check out my my poem "World of Night" im pretty sure I posted it, it is a good nature poem I wrote not to long ago... ~Rain~
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broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

...

Rain your walls are purple not white and u r not going to go crazy on me r u? Because most people who are traped in a whie room so crazy...so don't i need you now...
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Yes she does

And we all do that is true..this one for you rain showers coming down no more need to wear a frown soon the showers will all be gone flowers spring up with the break of dawn thank the rains thank the showers and thank the skye for sharing your sorrow wipe away the tears for no more fears rain is here skye is bright and oh how I wish you a peaceful night love you gals, always mona xoxoxoxo
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Silent_Rain

16 years 3 months ago

Im not going insane... yet...

Im fine, the walls were white in the room i started writing it in. That is a Pretty poem Mona!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love you both, My Skye and my Mona!!! ~Rain~

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