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Nowhere In Sight

Darkness falls upon this place,
Where devils and demons fall from grace.
Torturing souls for their delight,
Dancing around the candlelight.
They whisper things into our ears,
While preying on our deepest fears.
And so it is on this night,
The demons are felt, but nowhere in sight!
Tearing down the walls we've built,
Protecting us from our sin and guilt.
Without a place for us to hide,
The demons are able to get inside.
Souls are all they crave and devour,
Feeding on us gives them more power.
So this is their night,
Filled with much fright!
Feeling them strong,
but nowhere in sight!

— nunofyorbiznis, Feb 12, 2010

Critiques

hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear nunofyorbiznis:

Frightful and creepy, but nonetheless great poetic rendition of the life of demons and their unaware feeders. Nice work! Sincerely, Hugo
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nunofyorbiznis

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you for your kind

Thank you for your kind comment. I do appreciate it. Sincerely, Shannon Aspen
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Great first post

Great first post Nonofyorbiznis, I mean Shannon JK We have some great dark poetry and poets around here, you will fit right in! I liked your flow here, it felt good. Julie D.D.

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