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Z

mistek3z r mAiD

i can right and thats jus meh

i luv the winter

my face lights down

not me here dis crazy earth

i makes no cents

what im am saying?

i speaks so louldly

i rock wet musikz

weed dis poem again and u get me

misteks ar mad tu fex

go fegure

i half no rythm

i can't spell SDRAWKCAB

turn it around

u turn all the way

all dis time eye tie to point out

drink i am

and drug do think!!!

HaAHaA well??

^^ZOMBIE^^


— zombie, Feb 17, 2010

Critiques

Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

the topics ok but the

the topics ok but the spelling mistakes and 3's for E's ?? are really untidy and off putting for a reader I wont go on you asked not to be critiqued harshly Jayne-Chloe
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 3 months ago

umm, yea...

don't know wher ethis aws going. sounded spurty. keep writing, though. never hurts.
Z

zombie

16 years 3 months ago

well...

i just wrote this to be funny and I only tryed to express the one point on mistakes thats it!
S

sutton

16 years 1 month ago

I like

I think it kind of helps that I just smoked one, but i like it thought it was pretty interesting to read, What ever you think it's about then Thats what it about, i enjoyed the challenge
Z

zombie

16 years ago

well thanks a lot

the challenge is strange and my biggest mistake was not making enough mistakes. i'm glad you enjoyed it. I really think it puts your brain in a maze twist or something!

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