Spider & the Fly

aiiiiiiiii! ~A

Bravo ... one of your best, lovely rhythm love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x

A lovely poem, just as I like it, imaginative, heartfelt, and a good flow. I look forward to reading more of your poems.

I Love It, Well done!! I love the use of a spider and a fly to portray the feeling of being imprisoned by love for someone, it's great! Joel x

Ann of Norway Aw!!! Just wonderful Rosina, with the rhythm of a two step, is it? And it makes me want to get up and dance to it right now, I can't stop myself, you've got the rhythm going in my mind and I shall dance a spider and fly dance, one that no one has seen the like of before as I always do something different, as I hope my comments are always something different too, created for the occasion and what an occasion, I think I must go and run round the corridors here to let off steam, great stuff Rosinella. "and we can’t live this lie;" I just wanted the rhythm to be one tiny bit longer in this line? Not- in this lie, but that ammount. Maybe not? Love from me.

Love it Rosina. When it’s time for your departure, there’s so much I desire to say. But if I try to say too much, I’d be begging you to stay. Just one tiny thing that I thought spoilt this verse was the repeat of the word 'say'. Perhaps 'But if I try to speak too much'? or even 'but any attempt to articulate and'? Just a thought xxxx Judy

So wrapped in the loveliness of it I forgot to rate it for you. xx Judy

yes, the beauty of your spirit, revealed in this poem, the softness of your heart fantastic.........loved it.

This is a very nice :)

Venus Xena, **Hugs** Great, sad pen. Writing from the heart always carries the reader on the journey with you, making one feel the sweet happy memories as well as the pain and sorrow. Well done! Hugs, Venus xxx

How you are blossoming ...all you needed was the right amount of moisture (tears) good soil for rooted stability and that magic ingredient that Neo brought along the light of encouragement from a world of friends. Seabhac

Ann of Norway I didn't know you had depression dear sweet Glaswegian Rosina, your subject matter might have described it earlier, but that subject matter has always interested me; your need for a pet! You are a joy to read and that is a fact, so if our enthusiasm and pleasure at your poetry gives you a little of its warmth and joy, then we are doubly thankful that we, Neopoets exists to help, that's also what we are here for is it not. All poetry springing from the oversensitive mind wishing desperately to express itself in an 'artistic' manner, as is the natural wish of all life, expressing its life in the best manner possible. We just happening to find the word, a medium worthy of that dance in the music of its rhythm and meaning. I like the Indian view that music and dance are ONE thing, and that brings the music of poetry into this one thing, so lets just dance together on this great wide dance floor of Neopoets, a gallery of paintings-poems in their thousands surrounding us with their symphony of rhymes and utterances. Did that give you a wee smile me lass? Love to you and to your endeavour to strike a note of happiness into the grey waters of the Clyde river in this deep dark Winter. Ann sends her love to you too Rosinella there in the din of traffic-it nearly blew my eardrums when I stepped out of the underground in Glasgow, wow how can one live there without using ear plugs, its enough to depress me. Yet there are so many compensations in that big city on the hill. I meant to and that I just LOVED those spider eyes bewitching you, when one sees the spider up close they are so aren't they, like two shiny beads.

to break the flow of nice comments but uh... come on? the metaphor of the spider seemed too cliche, the rhythm too standard, and well... I dunno, I don't get much from this. your writing, to me, seems to be cramped into itself and lacks a sense of exploration. try sending it to antartica. sorry I can't say much better... :|