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Feb 18, 2010
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Immured By Nature
My friend, as I watch
You haven't a clue
Of the confusion you spawn
From the depths within you
As you rampage on
With your arms flailing round
I stand in shock
At the creature before me
Like an outcast from the herd
On your own to stray
With just claws and bare paws
A beast verses nature
The instincts within
Pure primal nature
Consumed all your thoughts
You're now braindead, an animal
Oblivious of your friends
Whom are just your environment
Bundles of broken branches
Mere twigs for you to crush
With Mutualistic behavior
They peck at your pests
You provide them a feast
Once used up, bonds decease
You are a parasite
Taking from us for your delight
Who cares of the harm you've done
So long as you've had your fun
I miss my friend
the one I respect
A charismatic soul
No Neanderthal
Your life's but a zoo
For you haven't a clue
The people who watch
They laugh at you
A spectator no longer
Here's a speck of advice
If my voice passes
the fur on your ears
May you finally be tamed
Flee the jungle
Exit your cage
Ignore all the prey
Quit being the animal
Become sane again!
You haven't a clue
Of the confusion you spawn
From the depths within you
As you rampage on
With your arms flailing round
I stand in shock
At the creature before me
Like an outcast from the herd
On your own to stray
With just claws and bare paws
A beast verses nature
The instincts within
Pure primal nature
Consumed all your thoughts
You're now braindead, an animal
Oblivious of your friends
Whom are just your environment
Bundles of broken branches
Mere twigs for you to crush
With Mutualistic behavior
They peck at your pests
You provide them a feast
Once used up, bonds decease
You are a parasite
Taking from us for your delight
Who cares of the harm you've done
So long as you've had your fun
I miss my friend
the one I respect
A charismatic soul
No Neanderthal
Your life's but a zoo
For you haven't a clue
The people who watch
They laugh at you
A spectator no longer
Here's a speck of advice
If my voice passes
the fur on your ears
May you finally be tamed
Flee the jungle
Exit your cage
Ignore all the prey
Quit being the animal
Become sane again!
— Carchuleto, Feb 18, 2010
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Stefan
16 years 3 months ago
Hi
Silent_Rain
16 years 3 months ago
Wow
Skybones777
16 years 2 months ago
wow...
Skybones777
16 years 2 months ago
wow...
Carchuleto
16 years 2 months ago
thanks!
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