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Immured By Nature

My friend, as I watch
You haven't a clue
Of the confusion you spawn
From the depths within you

As you rampage on
With your arms flailing round
I stand in shock
At the creature before me

Like an outcast from the herd
On your own to stray
With just claws and bare paws
A beast verses nature

The instincts within
Pure primal nature
Consumed all your thoughts
You're now braindead, an animal

Oblivious of your friends
Whom are just your environment
Bundles of broken branches
Mere twigs for you to crush

With Mutualistic behavior
They peck at your pests
You provide them a feast
Once used up, bonds decease

You are a parasite
Taking from us for your delight
Who cares of the harm you've done
So long as you've had your fun

I miss my friend
the one I respect
A charismatic soul
No Neanderthal

Your life's but a zoo
For you haven't a clue
The people who watch
They laugh at you

A spectator no longer
Here's a speck of advice
If my voice passes
the fur on your ears
May you finally be tamed

Flee the jungle
Exit your cage
Ignore all the prey
Quit being the animal
Become sane again!

— Carchuleto, Feb 18, 2010

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Stefan

16 years 3 months ago

Hi

Loved the way you express your thoughts and your emotions. But by judging, you.. yourself have become the animal, captured in your cage of the mind(ego). You can only see what still needs to be changed in you and the world as you look into the world. Love Stefan
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Silent_Rain

16 years 3 months ago

Wow

I like this, Its kinda sad that a friend of your has become like that, and it is also sad because I have had friends become like that and they hurt others not caring that they were hurting the people that they once loved... ~Rain~
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Skybones777

16 years 2 months ago

wow...

wow... I Am in love with this poem... again...wow.. .this is one poem i will read 100 times... may i use this Poem..?.it all gravy... as a jumping board in to the pool of words to make my own... thank you...do more like this one... PeAce...LaTer8^)
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Skybones777

16 years 2 months ago

wow...

just trying to getit to soaking tomyveryskin... again ...wow
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 2 months ago

thanks!

feel free to use it as you wish. Glad you enjoyed it.

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