under bald pate

under
bald pate

nowhere
I satin
a chair
dune
my hair;
now I ask you,
is that fair?

— barbsdad2003, Feb 20, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Arrow

16 years 3 months ago

Welcome back!

Making excellent use of visuals and sounds - enjoyed this little puzzle and think dunes and satins are excellent double images. I had a little trouble with "dune" initially. It will be easier recognized by Southerners, I think.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Chuck

You are a sight for sore eyes my friend ... you have been missed soooo much I left messages on your profile wondering how you were ... and you come back bearing poetry ... woooooooooooohoooooooooooooo welcome back hun ... and your name still makes me smile (huggles) and much love Jayne-Chloe x x x x

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Depends if you were a blond

Depends if you were a blond or not. ;-) ~A

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Smooth as satin

Ann of Norway Short and sandy. Ann

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

maybe so

bald pate ? what is that, Chuck? Went a lookin' but all the dictionaries screamed at me, the only thing I know is incarceration of a sort?? But on the poetry - whatever it took :) regards, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

barbsdad2003

16 years 2 months ago

In regard to pate,

In regard to pate, Dictionary.com says: 1.the crown or top of the head. 2.the head. 3.the brain. Which, if I may volunteer, is just what I intended ... i.e., any or all of the three definitions proffered, although bald brain does present a different pic to my mind, what there is left of it. And thanx for comment. Much appreciated. Yours, Chuck

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

Wondrous welcomes!

So great to see you posting, Chuck, you've been sorely missed. And a suitably pithy, clever return it is too. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Chuck

It is so good to see you back again! I'm so excited! I'm losing my hair, too! Always, Cat

barbsdad2003

16 years 2 months ago

My apologies to all ...

commenters above. When I posted this (I thought) dumb piece, I neglected to click on Subscribe to this page ... so got no notice of reactions. And assumed, rather wrongly, it seems, that no responses were forthcoming. (Which, frankly, would not have surprised me. I expected little to none. Really. But ... to my this-morning's delight, I see otherwise.) Thanx, Chuck

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