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Clem
Feb 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dirt

Dirt the stuff of creation,
Dirt the measure of a nation,
From dirt the beauty of earth,
Worth. . . admiration.
— Clem, Feb 23, 2010
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Nicole Michaels

16 years 3 months ago

Teeny poem

I like it. One suggestion, the line breaks. Try: Dirt the stuff of creation. Dirt the measure of a nation. From dirt the beauty of earth. Worth. Admiration. Or something along those lines.
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Nicole Michaels

16 years 3 months ago

Oh yeah

And the title: Wasted opportunity to add depth to such a short write. There are many forms of dirt. Why not explore that in the title?
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Clem

16 years 3 months ago

From dodo bird

Thank you so much those are great suggestions. I started writing the poem as a Welsh form known as,Englyn cyrch. Then I noticed that the Feb contest was supposed to be free verse so I had to crucify the form.

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