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Silent_Rain
Feb 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

February 23

Tranquil days
lazy days
under the sun
that kisses the Earth

it's not hot
nor is it cold
not one or the other
but in between

Oh, so sweet
is the sound of the breeze
playing in the trees
and dancing in your hair

Soft little clouds
idly drifting over
the medows of velvet flowers
taking bloom on this fine day

Laughing children
lets go play
in the sun
and enjoy this day




— Silent_Rain, Feb 23, 2010
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Silent_Rain

16 years 3 months ago

Lolz..

I love you kid... ~Rain~
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

i love this one !

i really love this its a soft poem. i observed you write with a lot of depth that only matured minds can only comprehend, it cool. chumfin
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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

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Thanks for the nice comment! It is nice to hear that I write in a way that only matured minds can understand... concidering that I'm olny 15, and most people think that if you are young you are immature...:) ~Rain~
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

woa!

wao! if at fifteen you could be this deep in your thought, i guess in the future if you keep it you will be a world class poet. be encouraged. never relent you have so much inside of you, you are a great mind. get a good mentor and you will do greatly. age is just but numbers , the maturity of your soul/intellect is what men cant understand. you7 are a genius i must confess. if you don't mind i will be following your works. thanks to you. chumfin
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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

^,..,^

Skye Alen... "If you think that this is deep you should look at some of my poems." Nice... Really nice... I ,ove you kid, why havent you been on latly??
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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

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Wow, thank you... I'm really glad that you think that, I wont mind in the least if you followed my work...:) ~Rain~

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