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broken_skye
Feb 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Love, Pain, and Memories.

Love is only pain,
 
Pain is only memories
 
Memories are forgotten.
 
Hidden down inside.
 
 
Never to come out.
 
Our hearts remember.
 
The pain and sorrow.
 
Our minds forget.
 
Locked inside the nothingness.
— broken_skye, Feb 23, 2010
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jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

I don’t mean to be

I don't mean to be cruel. I really am not comfortable in critiquing anyones writes. Skye... "Memories are forgotten"..?? One does not forget memories. That's why they are memories .. I get what you are trying to say. You need to re-work this... I look foward to the rewrite.
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broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks but no thanks

I will not change my poem because you don't understand. Indi is right and memories are forgotten if you push them down so far that you forget.
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Memories

Well, skye, memories are felt out until the feelings fade then they go in storage until it is a need that we recall but the feeling once attached to them is ususally almost gone or in fact gone. This process of memories is normal, Skye. With deep respect, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat." P.S Is this poem about alziemers or depression or both? Like indi says in a way some poetry can be a bit unclear (some very).
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Duly noted

And appreciated, a sad poem indeed. I shall return.. Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."
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broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanls Indi!

Thank you so much for the comment and finally someone whom understands what I am tring to say! Wow that is a relief.
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

LOL! good point

LOL! good point Darknlovely.. Jetz, i think Skye was trying to convey that it is the memory of the pain that is forgotten (if one truly decides to)..the problem is, it is not that easy to forget a pain inflicted to you, specially from someone we loved. "The mind may forget (due to Alzheimer's!), but the heart will always remember." ..overall, love this piece Skye..i love reading it over and over, (for me) no need to re-write (but still your choice)..
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broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Alone

I see that you like my work. But one question......What is so funny??
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

…its not the poem, Jetz

...its not the poem, Jetz was asking how a memory would be forgotten (i was thinking of an explanation for the possibility of that), when I read Darknlovely's clever answer.. :) so i just put the two together.. although I'm not laughing at the desease..
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

I never left a comment with

I never left a comment with the intent of upsetting you. Indi has his opinion, I have mine...Because he is of the same opinion as you....he's right? I'm wrong? Skye...I get the poem...I just feel the words, as they stand now....are confusing...ambiguous. A few changes could clear it all up, for all of us that are poetically challenged. Just my opinion...if you don't agree.... no problem. Peace. Sue
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

as I said ..

Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."
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Silent_Rain

16 years 3 months ago

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Its a pretty poem Skye, Plz tell me whats on your mind when I see you this weekend... ok, I love you Baby Sister! ~Rain~
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Skye, I read this poem

Dear Skye, I read this poem again..(skipping others comments)..it reminds me of a movie, "The Notebook" can't remember the actors! ..but i do hope you've watched it. it's a love story! ..like your poem, it is emotionally sad and in reality true...
Dark.Poetress

Dark.Poetress

16 years 3 months ago

great poem skye,it is very emotionally conected to depression

hey skye I definatly understand your poem,and also memories can be forgotten,if there unpleasent or u dont want to remember them they usually get pushed so far back in your mind that u forget them all together.well its a wonderful poem ans I hope I will have time to read even more of your work. ,Poet_Laurete
Mark

Mark

16 years 2 months ago

The last line

To cage anything especially an emotion is a bad thing. But to look and see is a beginning of setting it free. What else is there to do but blow up with the anger or implode ignoring it. Truly, Mark Resilient Flexibility

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