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Little Puppy

Her cruel hand slapped Jeanie’s head,

her mother yelled the daily chores.

`Scrub, wash; clean, dust,

and don’t forget the doors`.

 

Jeanie stumbled and fell to the floor,

she struggled to hide her streaming tears.

The cruelty from her mother,

Jeanie endured it for many years.

 

One day as Jeanie was shopping,

she saw something very queer.

A sack on the ground was moving,

she froze, quivering in fear.

 

Suddenly she heard a whimper,

she thought it sounded like a pup.

When she opened the dirty sack,

she bent down to pick it up.

 

The little dog was skeletal and scruffy,

Jeanie’s heart missed a beat.

The pup looked into her loving eyes;

poor little mite collapsed at her feet.

 

She lifted him tenderly to her breast,

softly she whispered into his shabby ears.

`Please don’t die dear little pup`,

and stirred to my falling tears!

 

She concealed him in her room,

but her mother heard him bark.

She threw the puppy in the cellar.

The wicked witch left him in the dark.

 

Her love for the puppy gave her courage.

She finally stood up to her mother’s rage.

Smiling Jeannie envisioned her future.

Turning her life over, a new page

 

All the while in the gloomy basement,

the little puppy lay alone in thought.

He wondered what was to become of him.

poor puppy felt miserable and distraught.

 

When the door to the cellar opened,

his ravenous body trembled in fear.

But then he heard a familiar voice,

`my poor little Puppy, come here`.

 

— xena465, Feb 27, 2010

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Love it Rosina. We often

Love it Rosina. We often need something to stir our courage to face up to what/ who we fear. Well done. Love and hugs Judy
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Judy…A little

Thanks Judy...A little lighter than yestereday's post...don't you think? Rosina xena465
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I always appreciatate help.

I always appreciatate help. I didn't mean to sound down on you. I'm just depressed at the moment. I could say it's my time of the month, but I'm years too old for that. Thanks Indi. Rosina xena465
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I read your prayer…it was

I read your prayer...it was so lovely. I wish I could've read it the other day, but I couldn't deal with anything, but I'm back to my old self...is that good or bad? Yeh it can only be good. Rosina xena465
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks…good

Thanks...good advice...I'll try to not let myself get so down in the future. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Amen to that one Indi

And Xena our friend she will do just that. Now shall I send her a pair of my magical boots. lol Xena We love you hun!! xoxoxooxoxo Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Got my magic boots on…Now

Got my magic boots on...Now I feel more like myself...ta so much kind friend. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Okay now tap your way to heaven

I am so glad to hear of that my Rosalina friend. I love when I got my boots on and I tap in them. The girls at work love it and I love it too. Hope the sun is shining through that golden hair of yours love Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Wow!

Amazing! Really made me angry at the mother/monster. I wanted to hear more at the end though. I felt like it left me hanging. I like how you use different viewpoints of both the puppy and the girl. As always, awseome work.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

That was intentional so that

That was intentional so that the reader can use their own imagination. It did have a final verse but felt it made the poem too long. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

My puppy in the basement

Oh I visualized this one first hand and I love the story feel to it. Hope all is well by you and see you in here soon, lovely writer.!! Magics02 xoxoxox "Determination Brings Success"
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 3 months ago

love it

You had me going in the cellar after him, i am a dog lover and i could see him in the cellar. well done again. Regards Roscoe...
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Me too. I love all animals.

Me too. I love all animals. I abhor all mistreatments of animals...even the cruelty of people, especially children. Thanks for your lovely comment. Rosina xena465
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Later as I was thinking about it, the ending fit perfectly.

Later, I was thinking that actually the ending fits perfectly, if the puppy is not an actual puppy but a metaphor for another part within you conflicted with the part that was abused, "embracing" that part. A therapist always used to tell me to "go to the scared child in my past and tell her it's okay and hug her" (I thought that was weird advice and don't see her anymore). But I started wondering if that's what you meant when you were talking about the puppy. Oh well, either way it works and sometimes it's good to leave the reader hanging.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I’m not telling you if

I'm not telling you if you're right...to keep it hanging. However, I do love your interpretation. It's a perfect, intelligent and thoughtful way to see it. Well done. Rosina xena465
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Ann of Norway“Jeanie

Ann of Norway "Jeanie whispered into his shabby ears.".........do you need Jeanie again? "he stirred to my falling tears!".........and stirred? "Jeanie fumed with mighty anger. She challenged her mother’s cruelness. No longer afraid of her wrath, she finally found her inner confidence.".........This verse I don't find flows quite so well as the others! "Meanwhile in the gloomy basement," ............All the while...? "He leapt straight into her arms..................I would like Jeanie here !!! Jeanie's arms with all his pitiful effort and might; Puppy wagged his tail; licking her face, it was a picture of wondrous delight.".............wondrous is a bit ? a picture of happy delight or? Hope you don't mind my suggestions they are only suggestions Rosina for your little tale here. Love to you from Ann.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Ta much Ann…I’ve made

Ta much Ann...I've made all the changes...I hope this reads better...you know I always like it when I can improve my poems...so thank you...see what you think? Rosina xena465
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

…its such a touching

...its such a touching story..for the meantime I couldn't find the words to express how this piece has found a connection to me.. ;)
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks…poor wee Puppy…

Thanks...poor wee Puppy... and to think people abandon animals in sacks like this for real...makes me very angry. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

Heartwrenching story lovely ... I have three dogs I would be lost without my mates ... I was so happy at your ending ... sometimes there can be a happy ending and I loved yours :) love Jayne-Chloe
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Yes for this wee puppy there

Yes for this wee puppy there was, but not so many has a happy ending. Thank you Jayne Rosina xena465
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jim

16 years 3 months ago

I love this

Your an artist,painting pictures with your words. Fantastic. Jim
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you so very much

Thank you so very much Jim...I do love animals and it breaks my heart that people can inflict such suffering on our little furry friends. Rosina xena465
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

First read of the morning!!I

First read of the morning!! I was determined to set aside a good while today to read your work, (ive so much catching up todo with many of my favs.) Im pleased i started with this one, its a lovely story. metaphor or not its a great feel good poem, where light reins over tragedy. Ive read the last verson, think its great the way the words flow and rhyme well. could also see that stella. vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Its has been my pleasure,

Its has been my pleasure, Ive read a good few now and they are all very good! well done a pleasure to spend my layin reading your work : ) Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

And it’s a pleasure to

And it's a pleasure to read your encouraging comments...keeps up the faith in me. Ta so much from a fellow brit. Rosina xena465
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Ammus

16 years 3 months ago

ammusReally nice and so

ammus Really nice and so simple.. I dont know I have grown much to make comments. This work can really give light to growing kids...
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks. It’s a nice poem

Thanks. It's a nice poem to read to a child. You're doing well and making friends...your poetry deserves to be shared Ammus. Rosina xena465
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

You’re already sharing

You're already sharing with your poetry with friends that appreciate you work. Rosina xena465
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

…and I’m back to

...and I'm back to comment. I really felt the connection of finding ones self worth.. there are times in our life where we face all sorts of obstacles most of which we just accept as it happens...not a word of pain, nor complain..sometimes all it takes is to see ourselves in a different form (like the poor puppy)..then we learn to stand up and find our voice, for all we know we are fighting for something or someone that represents us in the end.. :)
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Well said. Thanks for the

Well said. Thanks for the lovely comment. Nice to have you back Alone97. Rosina xena465

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