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loves rock

loves rock is strong and brave,
it lives on the cliffs of the houha river,
as love spends the day at her fathers grave,
the touch of her rocks hand makes love shiver.

devotion is felt with all their hearts,
moving together,
like working arts,
their souls alight with stormy weather.

loves rock  hears her sigh,
it was not to be amiss,
she felt as she were on some strange high,
she new it came from her loving rocks kiss.
— Dark.Poetress, Feb 28, 2010

Critiques

RW

Rob Williams

16 years 3 months ago

sounds to me that your feet

sounds to me that your feet are firmly planted on solid ground and your looking to the sky. but why listen to me,for who the hell am I.
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Quite nice

I like this writing. The poem whispers in metaphore. Keep on keeping on.. Truly, Mark You are the leaf, I am the tree. Cling onto me, I'll grow into you. http://www.neopoet.com/node/36042

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