Matrimonial Duties

Hit a chord with me with this one Rosina ... sorry I cant add anything more intelligable this one hit a chord love Jayne-Chloe

There are a few of us here that have addressed this topic in our own ways I have written a few but we are thinking of putting together a mass submission to a mag of different stories from all round the world http://www.neopoet.com/node/33125 the convo started on this link ... we have yet to move forward wasnt long ago we broached the subject but if your interested there is room for more ... your poem fits the bill to a T so if your interested Nina and Vix and I have already started talking about it Jayne-Chloe

strange thing is one suddemly refused to play deaf and dumb and he didn't know wtf to do. Unfurtunately others were not so courageous and continued to suffer. I think hurt can run so deep that it cannot be worked out or even put safely in storage. truly, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

My daughter's x was abusive. (His father was, though his step father was the kindest man) I lived for several years fearing for her life. I don't want to revisit that except to say that she left him when my grandson was a year or so, fought to keep him, (he had friends in high places to add insult to injury). My grandson (21) is one hell of a good man (my daughter's partner, his step father is the kindest man), even though he now lives with his father. You can love the sinner and hate the sin. He has/we have a large extended family of half brothers, sisters, and brothers are not flesh but none the same. "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti Sometimes the war is in the family. And it's worse seeing your daughter being on the other side of the hand of a self-loathing, angry man. ~A

thought the imagery was spot-on. There are some grammatical problems you may want to take a look at. My only frustration with this poem is the almost regular meter. It has a strong beat but it's not consistent. Still, I want to read it with consistent meter so it feels somewhat awkward to me.

Wow your poem left me open-mouthed literally .. I had to consciously remind myself to close it before I started looking weird. Beautiful write! =)

Topical and tough painful subject. I think you handled it well building suspense and release in the end. Violence can beget violence. raskin

:( I too have seen the effects of a waste of life like that too, not personally but from afar, and eventually he was met by Karma's bitch slap, but 10 years of abuse is hard to let go, thus the suicide. Poor tortured souls.

This poem depicts a deplorable situation which is all too frequent. I have personal knowledge of this. I was lucky, I only spent 18 months with this monster. Then I broke free. So this poem strikes a chord with me, too. I have the reminder of a broken jaw and a few other broken bones, but the broken spirit was the worst. Great poem. Always, Cat

awsome for the content rosina. A couple of lines I stumbled over, but by the time i've got past all of the comments to have my say, I've forgotten which ones. there were just a couple that seemed to have an extra beat. i'll find them for you if you want me to. lahasax judy

Ann of Norway Good tale, very good tale Rosina, and well told too, how horrid and how unecessary it is for anyone to live in this manner, when they could enjoy a life together with so little adjustment and so much more love. We are different men and women, and should early be able to learn of those differences so as to understand each other better, we don't, and still we don't, we can send a man/woman to the moon but we still don't understand each other!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Its all chance what we learn and what we don't it seems to me, and takes YEARS before we realise how different we are, our needs and hopes, all. But so it will go on it seems unless the young stand up for learning of that type and begin to joyfully know more and have richer lives less full of strife and misunderstandings. Vive la diffèrence I say though!!!! Ann.

There's your fifth star Rosina lahasax judy

Hey Rosina, As you know this is an experience i share to. We are going to put together something, and when the process starts of collecting pieces or talking about it again then i will def let you know. This is a gritty piece, better for the edits. well told and to true to often. I went through a period of fighting back, ( i thought it would help him stop if i stood up for myself, i loved him and didnt want to leave at first) but it made it worse and i stopped stricking back. i also didnt want to be a person that did that. it put me down to his level. i knew that leaving was the best thing to do. saddly some poeple cant and the repercussions have been big. But time and a strong desire to conquere negative times have seen me through. I dont know what you do presently, but have you thought about volunteering at a refuge for abused people? I bet your experience and kindness would be really apprieciated and give you something valuable to help your own sence of self and confidence. love vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes