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Down by the river

Observe the wind rattling
through dry bamboo

the sepia clouds
reflected in stark water

the fish clinging
to sullen rocks

everything waiting for some
change in the weather

either the acceleration of winter
or something warmer

like the perspiration of the man
driving a stake into the ground

his efforts echoing through
squat houses with blue roofs

arousing deserted pylons
whose wires are suddenly

smokestacks unraveling in the wind
wild cranes rising in the steel sky.


— Heading South, Mar 08, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Hello. So glad to read

Hello. So glad to read this. I have faith in beautiful poems. ~A "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Anna,

Dear Anna, so glad you liked this. Thanks for your beautiful comment. Love & hugs, Daniel "Ride the clutch pen in hand, smuggling lines like contraband..."
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Daniel

This felt like a slow motion kata in martial arts .... movement upon movement slowing going into the next ... sigh you are becoming a favourite of mine love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Heading South

Heading South

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jayne

Dear Jayne, I like that - a slow motion kata! So glad you liked this. Love & hugs, Daniel "Ride the clutch pen in hand, smuggling lines like contraband..."

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